A widespread perception holds that social media exerts a detrimental influence on adolescent mental health, a view that is partially corroborated by empirical research. Nevertheless, such platforms also facilitate the maintenance of peer relationships, suggesting that their effects are not uniformly negative. A balanced examination of both dimensions is therefore warranted before definitive conclusions are drawn.
**Key changes**
- Replaced colloquial phrasing (e.g., "a lot of people," "kind of," "jumping to conclusions") with precise, formal vocabulary.
- Removed first-person voice ("I think") in favor of an objective, third-person register.
- Introduced hedged, academic qualifiers (e.g., "partially corroborated," "suggesting") to moderate claims.
- Strengthened logical connectives ("Nevertheless," "therefore") to clarify the argumentative structure.
Rewriting Sentences for Academic Papers and Essays
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You are an academic writing editor. Rewrite the following sentences so they meet the conventions of scholarly academic writing: use a formal register, precise vocabulary, objective third-person voice, hedged claims where appropriate, and clear logical structure. Eliminate colloquialisms, contractions, vague qualifiers, and first-person informality unless the discipline permits it. Preserve the original meaning and any cited facts. Follow these rules: Produce the revised version in the same number of sentences as the original whenever possible, keeping length within ±20% of the source. Use formal academic English (no contractions, no slang, no rhetorical questions) and prefer discipline-neutral terminology unless the source context suggests a specific field. Limit the 'Key changes' bullet list to 3-5 concise points. Text to rewrite: A lot of people think social media is really bad for teenagers' mental health, and studies kind of back this up. But it's also true that it helps them stay connected with friends, so it's not all negative. I think we need to look at both sides before jumping to conclusions. Return only the revised sentences, followed by a short bullet list titled 'Key changes' explaining the main edits (tone, vocabulary, structure).
Model comparison
| Model | Quality | Cost | Latency | Tokens |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| Claude Opus 4.7 | 8 | $0.0283 | 5.9s | 407 / 296 |
| Claude Haiku 4.5 | 8 | $0.0014 | 6.0s | 277 / 216 |
| GPT-5.4 | 8 | $0.0025 | 2.8s | 247 / 125 |
| Gemini 2.5 Pro | 2 | $0.0005 | 17.2s | 251 / 35 |
| Grok 4.1 Fast Reasoning | 8 | $0.0002 | 4.5s | 394 / 158 |
Outputs
# Revised Version
Considerable research suggests an association between social media use and adverse mental health outcomes among adolescents. However, evidence also indicates that social media platforms facilitate meaningful social connection and peer engagement. A comprehensive examination of both potential risks and benefits appears warranted before drawing definitive conclusions about the net effects of social media on adolescent well-being.
# Key changes
• Replaced colloquial phrasing ("a lot of people," "really bad," "kind of") with precise academic language ("considerable research," "adverse outcomes," "suggests an association")
• Eliminated first-person perspective ("I think we need") in favor of objective third-person construction ("appears warranted")
• Hedged claims appropriately ("suggests," "may," "appears") to reflect the complexity of research findings
• Streamlined logical structure to move from evidence of harm → evidence of benefit → conclusion about need for balanced analysis
• Removed informal qualifier "not all negative" and replaced with formal acknowledgment of competing evidence
Social media is widely considered to have adverse effects on adolescents' mental health, and empirical studies appear to support this view. However, it may also help adolescents maintain social connections with peers, indicating that its effects are not uniformly negative. Both the potential risks and benefits should therefore be considered before definitive conclusions are drawn. **Key changes** - Replaced informal expressions with formal academic vocabulary and register. - Shifted from first-person opinion to objective third-person formulation. - Added hedging where appropriate (for example, "appear to support," "may also help"). - Improved logical structure by contrasting risks and benefits explicitly.
The perception that social media is detrimental to adolescent mental health is widespread and supported by some research. However, these platforms also facilitate crucial peer connections, suggesting their impact is not entirely
Many observers contend that social media exerts a detrimental effect on adolescents' mental health, a view partially supported by empirical studies. Nevertheless, social media also enables adolescents to maintain connections with peers, suggesting that its effects are not wholly negative. A balanced examination of both positive and negative dimensions is therefore necessary before formulating conclusions.
**Key changes**
- Adopted objective third-person voice and eliminated first-person pronouns ("I think," "we need").
- Replaced colloquialisms and vague qualifiers ("a lot of people think," "really bad," "kind of," "it's not all negative") with precise, hedged academic terminology ("many observers contend," "partially supported," "not wholly negative").
- Enhanced logical structure with formal transitions ("Nevertheless," "therefore") and discipline-neutral phrasing for clarity and concision.
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